The post was good, but i will need to add a catchy slogan to get more audience, and also add more information about the flavors, and why it is really worth buying. I included prices, available flavors, Opening times, and what month the shop opens and closes at, but like on the top sentence, that will needed to be included in the future.
The Product is aimed for people of all ages (children, teenagers, adult, elderly) to enjoy in summer, or on a really warm day in spring and autumn. It is for both male and female, and especially for people who love slushies', and don't mind a bit of a cold treat, and brain freeze! It is at a cheap price, so it will make a good amount of profit, instead of paying £1.20 for a small slushy from the high-street!
I think this slogan would be level 4a-5c because the description is good and the picture looks quite eye catching and the imformation about the place. well done kayna (:
The post was good, but i will need to add a catchy slogan to get more audience, and also add more information about the flavors, and why it is really worth buying. I included prices, available flavors, Opening times, and what month the shop opens and closes at, but like on the top sentence, that will needed to be included in the future.
ReplyDeleteThe Product is aimed for people of all ages (children, teenagers, adult, elderly) to enjoy in summer, or on a really warm day in spring and autumn. It is for both male and female, and especially for people who love slushies', and don't mind a bit of a cold treat, and brain freeze! It is at a cheap price, so it will make a good amount of profit, instead of paying £1.20 for a small slushy from the high-street!
ReplyDeleteI think this slogan would be level 4a-5c because the description is good and the picture looks quite eye catching and the imformation about the place. well done kayna (:
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